Thread: anachronisms

the speed camera’s sign
is that of an old camera.
this is clearly a lie.

is it that the image of an old camera
carries more weight in the mind’s eye?
or that when travelling at speed
they’re easier to distinguish?
or that old things are more indicative
of what they are than new?

whatever the reason
i too encourage people to notice me
and take note of those who speed on by.

Do you mean acronyms? Which is what your string of initials aren't, or is time disjointed and your string of letters from another era altogether?

Firebird, my love, I am seeking to find you. Please be a doll and restore this piece. I found it to be quite clever, but I've been without the laptop and can't type on this iPad to save my life, so my replies are piling up. I should be back in business soon, and I'm absolutely positive that I am not the only one who will feel the piece is clever. Thanks so much.

Best,
Lisa

Hi Lisa,

I have restored it. I took it down because I didn't really feel that the final stanza worked, and was trying to think of a better way to end it. To be honest, being clever in a poem is not always desirable, especially if it sounds forced or contrived, which I, unfortunately, felt about this poem.

Thanks for reading as always. I don't know where you get the time.

You deserve some type of award for the feedback and encouragement you give so many people on this site. I think more and more good poets are starting to come through from sites like this. It's amazing the way online poetry workshops have made it possible for so many poeple to share their poems who may never have done so. They have truly democratised the writing of poetry. Sorry, to ramble on.

Many thanks,

Firebird