Thread: For Yet a While

This African sunset
is the last I will know
for yet a while,
but I’ll dream often
of the falling orange sun
in the sky over mountains.
As layered heavens
find embrace in my eyes,
I imprint this moment upon my heart;
tomorrow is goodbye,
but I’ll know you again
when God brings me my friend,
and once again
we can share sunsets together.

Until that time comes
I will find you in my dreams.
I know in my heart
that Heaven bears close resemblance
to your rolling hills
and streets teeming with children,
and in your face, I see God
as never I have before,
so remember me, Africa,
and I’ll remember you.

beautiful imagery in the beginning. you start of strong and concise. I do favor the first stanza however. The second is more simplistic and doesn't follow the same visual rhythm.

overall this was a pleasure to read.

I know what it is to fall in love with a country and I thought this expressed that feeling beautifully. I thought the last two lines were a little too blunt, but other than that I thought it was great. Very evocative.

Very nice.