Thread: A Poem that I thought might make a song

FREE'D MY SOUL


Didn't I tell you that I was lost?
That I was afraid?
Didn't I say I had lost my way?
Had nowhere to turn.
About to drown in a sea of fear.
No longer able to face the world.
Unable to sort out who I was.
To face the world at all.


Then you reached out to me
Reached out to touch my heart.
Helped my soul to free.
Of my life became a part.


Didn't I tell you i was alone?
Had no one to love.
I knew in my heart that no one would care
If I lived or died.
I knew my life would not bring me love.
There would be no one my dreams to share.
Doomed to a life of bitter remorse
I knew I could not face.


Then you reached out to me.
Reached out to touch my heart.
Helped my soul to free.
Of my life became a part.


Then you reached out to me.
Reached out to touch my heart
Helped my soul to free.
Of my life became a part.

Hi Dean. I agree that could make a good song.

It reminds me of some of Bernie Taupin's early lyrics, which became big hits for Elton John.

Did you have any sort of musical style in mind when you wrote it?

I agree, it does sound like a good song. Did you check out our lyrics section?

I am not good with music, but I had the idea that it was the sort of song Elton John might sing.

Thank you for the kind things you both said

np, Dean. It's genuinely good writing. You should take Gumby's advice, and post it onto the Lyrics section. I'm just about to open a thread on there appealing for lyric writers, because I have the opposite problem to you. I'm a music composer who's not so hot at lyrics!

I just looked at your profile, and you say that you've just finished GCSE's. That would only make you about 16 or 17, right? I have to say that is remarkably mature writing for your age, and I can't wait to read some more.