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    Infection

    Another one from a couple months ago. Just a release of emotion, really, but I thought I'd post it in the meantime while I'm working on my latest piece.

    Infection


    Fingernails embedded in white tiles
    on the wall. She thinks she can’t breathe
    like this. So it’s cold. Body rolled up.
    There is a point—this time it’s breaking.
    Ceramic pumps of blood in her skin,
    and everything hurts like this.
    Burning circles that live in her skull—
    but they are wet. It’s all over now.

    Not for me. Head under bath water.
    I cannot cry when it’s quiet. Just bubbles
    that sleep on my eyes. I do not try
    to breathe here. I have scars that I
    like you to rip open. Smother me
    in passion, in sweet words, and make
    me feel like I am me. And I am good.
    Just let me bleed, when you dig out
    my veins.

    She will break her fall with her lips,
    suck the floor, make it clean. She is everything.
    Nobody loves her like this. And nothing
    feels like water on the floor. That blankets
    her body. Keeps her elastic, keeps her cold.
    Any direction, she can go. Too far, she can cry.
    The lock clicks into place—this is her place
    to be in pieces. She hates that everything
    is white. Makes them notice.

    Tell me more. I like to be between the intimate
    details that make my heart light up. Smoke
    to push me out of the water. No silence
    while I’m naked. I make lines when
    you give me a place to hurt. A mirror
    to show me what I am not. All the glass
    is broken on the floor. I could roll
    over all the edges and stitch myself
    with barbed wire. Let the infection be
    all over me.

    And she is going to cry.
    Last edited by Angel101; 06-15-2011 at 10:42 PM.
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    Feel bad bumping my own thread, but it's kind of lonely down here.
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    I really love the rolling in glass/barbed wire image. That is very imaginative and original.

    The rhythm of this piece is nice, as are the sounds. I was a little confused with the alternating "she" and "me" though. Maybe that's just me...
    Poets are always taking the weather so personally. They're always sticking their emotions in things that have no emotions.

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