Thread: At the height of spring

The trees are swathed
in clumps of glittering sequins.
The sunlight's golden touch
is warm and friendly, like a human hand.
People are out biking, or walking their dogs--
happy fluffy dogs that don't bite.
Tulips and daffodils are in bloom,
violins and ivory keys in tune,
and everywhere laughter is strewn.
The whole world is at its best
at the height of spring.

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The trees are swathed
in clumps of glittering sequins.
The sunlight's golden touch
is warm and friendly, like a human hand.
People are out biking, or walking their dogs--
happy fluffy dogs that don't bite.
Tulips and daffodils are in bloom,
violins and ivory keys in tune,
and everywhere laughter is strewn.
The breeze brings pollen and sneezes,
but the petals will not fall yet,
and it's calm enough for birdsong.

A dear, refreshing poem. One I'm not capable of writing because I dance with the dark on paper. This poem cheered my day. Thank you.

Thank you.

Very nice. You have any publications?

Originally Posted by asahmed1

You have any publications?

What? Um... sorry, I didn't understand that.

Nice. Happy happy. Liked it.

Originally Posted by candid petunia

Nice. Happy happy. Liked it.

"Happy happy" indeed.

Originally Posted by Trides

What? Um... sorry, I didn't understand that.

Have published your poetry?

I published one poem several years ago, in a collection of poems by different children... I no longer remember the name of the poem or of the book, but I believe the poem was a sonnet about writer's block and despair.

This was a nice, very calming read. Of course, I live in Florida, so we don't really have spring. Just summer...all year long. Ha, ha.

Anyway, you've got some lovely imagery here. And I liked this:

Tulips and daffodils are in bloom,
violins and ivory keys in tune,
and everywhere laughter is strewn.

I love it when rhymes just pop in like that. It's very refreshing.

I wasn't too fond of the ending. I don't think you needed to "bring it home" like that. I actually thought it took away from the rest of this piece. I'm getting all these lovely images and enjoying the scene, and then I get this really conspicuous ending.

Otherwise, it was a nice piece. I generally prefer poetry with more depth, but I still thought this was good.

Oh, all right then. I'm not editing this, but yes, the ending does seem rather childish, maybe abrupt. But that's who I am--I mean, I think it's okay that way.

well, of course I like this one - spring and nature and a bit of humor - a good simile for the sunlight, and "everywhere laughter is strewn" is both simply stated and very effective is painting a bright picture.

I too found the "sum up" at the end a bit out of place - better to show the world "at its best", than to actually say it.

---todd

This is so pretty, Trides, and I usually shy away from pretty. You've captured spring well. As for the summation, just nix the last line, the title already says it, repeating it is unnecessary. Leaving it at "the whole world is at its best" isn't quite as conspicuous in my humble opinion. Thanks for this.

Best,
Lisa

Ah, everyone hates that last line. Maybe I just got tired and decided to end the poem. Perhaps I shall change that line. I don't want the poem to go on and on.
Merci beaucoup, fellow writers.