Thread: Binge Downloading

New music cures boredom:
Doctors orders, taken on board.
The internet is a fine source
for hours of eye dried fun.

Click through archives of interviews
with cheerful junkies' reminiscence,
memory a bit crusty and hungry
for an insomniac's curious click.

Seven of my dollars constitutes a revival.
I prefer to hit up the blogs and get
the out-of-prints for free.

Reference current sound preference;
pull up names that don't mean a thing,
then the speakers scream musical suicide
and my neighbors deserve an apology.

My library buckles under
the weight of redundancy;
classics are always being remastered
with bonus tracks buttressed by liner notes,
unreleased instrumental demos, and live
versions of greatest hits on cheap MP3's

for prices so insanely low
a fan becomes hooked and
dangles snapping on the bait.

My archives need to be complete;
stuff the audio player with the kill,
relishing the chase. Finally found
prey sufficiently stimulating to tickle
my musical tastes.

More hours go by than the aggregate
of inaccurate song times, titles, and track lists
begging for immediate correction before

five o'clock birds chirp out of sync
with the speaker's beat. It's blue outside,
and too blue to sleep.

Excellent! Too pooped to properly crit. Fantastic wordplay as always. Would play with the enjambment a bit. Will elaborate tomorrow. Over and out till then...nice one, Edge.

Best,
Lisa

Fantastic word play, indeed! I know someone (hubby) who fits this scenario so perfectly. If he only read poetry, how I'd love to show him this.

As for the line breaks, I did see a couple that seemed off, the words in pink seem like they would flow better if moved down to the next line. Just my opinion, Edge. Solid work.



More hours go by than the aggregate of
inaccurate song times, titles, and track lists
begging for immediate correction before

five o'clock birds chirp out of sync with
the speaker's beat. It's blue outside,
and too blue to sleep.

Oops, Gumby beat me to it. I was about to say the same thing with the "with" on the first line of the last stanza.

But this really got me smiling. Reminds me of... er, myself.

Sorry for the delay, Edge, life yanked my choker and yet again kept me from my fun. I must have been really weary the other night because aside from what Cindy mentioned, the enjambment works. Although I would have broke it differently, my breaks are positively boring, they do work as they are. It was a joy to read this again, the wordplay is truly a delight. I especially adored "eye dried fun" and an "insomniac's curious click", but the entire piece is peppered with gems. Great work, love.

Best,
Lisa

Thanks for the input Gumby, Fuhrer and CD. Your line break suggestions very much improved the flow.

Cheers.