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    Miss Mannequin

    I am fashioning a mannequin
    with simple, elegant curves and black coal-like buttons.

    She has soft cotton casings.
    She has pure ivory legs.

    But I can’t find her blue eyes,
    and I can’t find her hair;

    I can’t find her precious lips,
    and I can’t find her long white nails.

    There she stands before me,
    unmoving like a corpse;

    Simply being,
    simply being.

    And there she stands,
    because ignorance and bliss and how can I destroy that shield

    when I know what two eyes, two lips, two ears
    can do.

    And how can I be the one who brings her into this world and says,
    You’re on your own, darling.
    Wherever I sat - on the deck of a ship or at a street café in Paris or Bangkok - I would be sitting under the same glass bell jar, stewing in my own sour air.

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    The image presented in this piece is fascinating and vivid. Very nice!

    I think some economization can happen in the last three stanzas, but the first few couplets are just beautiful.
    Poets are always taking the weather so personally. They're always sticking their emotions in things that have no emotions.

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