Thread: One of my first

So, yeah. I am new here and I found an old poem I had written when I used to write poetry.. it was one of the few that I liked. I would like your opinion on this extremely short poem (It's only 8 lines and like 44 words.). I also wrote it in my years of teenage angst.

God, the cycle is vicious
They all seem blessed beyond belief
It is all sadness and depression
I'm crying in the night

I'm thirsting for your justice
O God, be my relief
Lord, help me escape this obsession
God, please make this right

*EDIT* Keep in mind of course, this was one of my first, so it's not amazing. But one I decided was acceptable.

I think the poem needs more development- it's very vague and although I think I can discern a concept of begging for release/relief, I don't know what for, or why. What is the 'obsession' that's mentioned in the second stanza? That flicker of a reason, a story held me and made me curious. It just needs more of a narrative snaking through it, in my opinion.

By the way, can totally understand the teenage angst thing. I'm 23 but sometimes I still feel like I'm going through it!