Thread: no longer young

part of me's
like one of those picturesque villages
that has stayed the same
for strangers
who have no interest
in nearby places
that had to change

I think this is a nice little picture you've created. It has such a nice, drab feeling. I did get confused at the repetition of strangers though. I think either one has to come out or there needs to be some punctuation.

I like the poem, but I don't get how the title relates to it. But since I understand things a bit late, maybe I'll have to come back again and re-read it.


I've also seen a lot of people here who don't use punctuation. Find it interesting, since I can't write without it; feels incomplete. So coming here made me feel, "Wake up. There are other fish in the sea too."


Since Squalid Glass got a bit confused at the 'strangers' part, tell me how it looks this way. I felt it needed punctuation. But then, it's really up to you since it's your poem.


"that has stayed the same
for strangers--
strangers who have no interest"