Thread: my day , poem < toshwell

my day


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when the light comes to me and say
wake up wake up this is nice day
some thing touch my head and eye
just like saying get up and fly
why not ,, i said,, i will try
as long as i will do not pay
to the park to the park let s go there
my legs were singing this way
have fun and get ice cream
and come back again and play
people very happy under sun
and every one feel happy to stay
raheem toshwell

Hi raheem, welcome to W.F.

I have the feeling that English isn't your mother tongue? I think that it must be very hard to write fluently in another language, and to write poetry, must be even harder. Kudo's to you for being brave enough to attempt it.
I like the feeling of what you are saying here, and even though some of the grammar isn't correct, you still show a joyful and playful day with a wonderful spirit to it.