Thread: And She Kills as She Reads

And She Kills as She Reads

The archipelagos on her arms
are unstable bits of brown;
they brush against her cheek
in her struggles to solve
first-world problems.
As she rests, the islands
experience a black out
—total darkness hidden in light flesh.

That spot God tattooed
is shifting in her age;
Mount Sinai has formed
and I can only imagine
there are lives in the wrinkle;
the Pharaohs of Egypt must live there
with a tiny Moses
and all of the dead children.

I love the beginning of this - Mother Earth and the contours of islands nd hilss but I get a bit lost with the spot tattoed and the biblical references.

hmmmm.... i think you are refering to mother earth itself right? but the poem is very nice and has a very deep meaning=D> but i would prefer if the meaning was more clearer.

Some of the lines have such a lovely shape to them. Example: "unstable bits of brown" and "That spot God Tattooed" are really nice lines. I love the idea that an entire world exists inside her. I get the feeling that there is something ancient and very important that lay beneath the surface. Something cryptic.

There was a little disturbance in the flow of these lines:
"As she rests, the islands
experience a black out
—total darkness hidden in light flesh."

Although the idea is clear. Overall, I really like this. Just a little more work will make this very beautiful, indeed. Thank you for posting : )

I like your take on the mother earth metaphor. It conveys a fragility and a sense of constant change as the earth gradually ages.

Thought this line was a bit clunky & out of place, I would actually maybe omit it:

'—total darkness hidden in light flesh.'

I'm working on this one some more. I might expand it a little as well. I'll be sure to post an edit. Thanks for your comments