Thread: Fever Dreams

Fever Dreams
I was three stories
high, soaring
on floral print clouds covered by a downy
veil. Her emerald eyes stalking, she sat
alongside, feet dangling in the ethereal
pool of air like a child in summer,
those burning gems- a thunderous
tremble shook this heavenly hammock, a cushioned
quake, but arm swung overboard, heavy
like an anchor it deposed me, reluctantly
plummeting, a raindrop toward flame I
found myself
on the floor, cool linoleum chilled my cheek,
the chime of a cell phone beckoned arms to float
upward. Her slender fingers blanketed my hand,
lukewarm cheek against my heaving chest, weight
like an anvil, I forgot to breathe then couldn’t, her suffocating
eyes strangling me. Another tremor ripped through the taupe
tiled bed, now exhaling heat, glowing flames rising
on the walls as I
woke up on rustic
floral patterns, my brow soaked and ablaze,
body shivering. Multi-coloured glow of Christmas
lights in January and internal inferno clouding
my perception. Missing those emerald
eyes incessantly haunting, only
in fever dreams.

psychedelic to say the least

but it was hard to keep up with the story

Just based on observation i get a sense that this woman is an addiction...those I may be horribly wrong

This looks surrealistic.

It has nice subtlety too.

My favorite phrase probably is the image "pool of air like a child in the summer."

You seem to exploit the fire's imagery with great effect. I was contemplating something like that once if that is what you were doing. It was something however I was going to use in a story. So I could be wrong.

I think the poem only needs to be a bit more direct rather than having to guess if the guess was wrong. It seems veiled by a lot of imagery.

I like the dream landscape you create here, so believable when you are in the midst of a dream. So unbelievable later, when you wake up and think back on it. Very nice.

I love the part about the "Multi-colored glow of Christmas lights in January"-genius.
The beginning was confusing, and then when we returned to real life it was clear what I was reading. Excellent.