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    Bicycle Ride

    A wheel turns, where someone asks for a ride,

    I had something to call my own,

    to ride a bicycle to start a ride,

    was to begin an adventure not my own,

    the day I crashed I did not feel sorry,

    the metals wheels were like Apollo’s chariot turning,

    never did they stop,

    but never did I call my god's forces to help,

    to be a child in a bicycle was something else,

    my childhood smelled like cake in the oven,

    there was nothing missing

    when I got use to beatings,

    when I fell off the bicycle.

    A crooked smile was something undiscovered,

    to set foot in a new land was something,

    to set sail like pirates at the sea,

    To Poseidon I never begged for mercy.

    To be a bicycle rider was never to beg for mercy,

    but it was to beg for time mom had,

    for the times my leg never healed

    they would bake a cake to learn to ride

    the small things we did our time,

    when time was golden in a hour glass or in a jail cell,

    when I knew I was home late and lost at the neighbors house

    never did I break a bone anymore,

    it was too much

    to be on a bicycle was for a moment to feel immortal

    like a stunt devil in the turnpike.

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    Thank you for appreciating it.

    It's been a while since I wrote poetry. I will experiment with prompts if I can write good poems based on them. I like to write on war and issues, but maybe there is some hidden knowledge to write better these poems. This poem was inspired from when I was a child.

    The reference of the cake has to do with the fact that my mother would bake a cake for me to ride a bicycle ride. The first attempts ended in failures.
    Last edited by namesake; 01-27-2011 at 04:42 AM.

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    the metals wheels were like Apollo’s chariot turning,

    my childhood smelled like cake in the oven,

    to be on a bicycle was for a moment to feel immortal

    like a stunt devil in the turnpike.

    These lines spoke to me of the wonderful imagination of a child on their bike. They captured the essence well.

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