Thread: The Unrepented

How now the crow
Sings; to night, to flight!

The Man was at the
Crossroad’s right, to which
A lamb of white came
in the night.

A Lone Man, A Sadden Man,
only wanting to see the eyes
Of the other.

A Sinful Man, one who
was too late to repent.

He yelled to the Darkening
Clouds; Misery, be forgot!

Down; he looked to the
Eye of the Lamb, but
The Lamb did not look back.

A screech, again; One late, One forgot,
All forlorn!

Alone, the piercing eyes of The Lamb
Told him so, with not a look at all.

Darkness was the man, now:
Misery, the only feeling he knew,
And that the world no not….

He now is The Lone Man,
He now is The Sadden Man,
He now is The Sinful Man.
All so, that not even The Lamb could save….

Something about the rhythym of this piece intrigued me. And, though I can't seem to logically follow it all, I'm left with some clear imagery.

In particular, this made me consider how it's funny we so often perceive our situations with a sense of irrecoverable hopelesness, as if each of our relatively frail actions hold some sort of eternal weight that keeps us away from any other force or power. The fleeting, failing, changeable, unfaithful, corruptible, element within us surely can be perceived, understood, and accomodated should there be the will to seek out those who make questionable turns at the various crossroads of life.

It brings to mind a phrase I heard recently - 'The crucial and perhaps only critical failure of man is the failure to continue moving forward'

Thanks for the post.

I agree....I was intrigued with this as well... I loved the second verse...putting right in there was great. I also liked how he looked to the Lamb but the Lamb wouldn't look back.

Good job, bc!

ty terrib and JBlanton, I'm glad you like it!

This is a really good poem. Sad, yet amazing!

Originally Posted by charolsxd

This is a really good poem. Sad, yet amazing!

heh, thanks.

This really is a sad poem and it has a lot of meat to it. I like the way you use some Christan Sentiment and not go too overbearing on it. The capitalization of Lamb, Man, and Night, gave them a more serious and important roll in the poem.

The last stanza was really the best, in my opinion. From the transition to the indefinite article, to the definite article. (Ex. he was a sadden man, to He is The Sadden Man.) and also adding capitalization to noun and adjective.

Really good poem, and I hope to see more.