Thread: a disagreeable path

their path had been muddy,
and he felt as if half was still with him.
he scraped his boots,
rubbed them in the grass
and by the morning, what was left
had started to flake.
after a quiet breakfast,
he brushed away
what remained,
and polished his boots
until they shone,
then put them next to his wife’s
which were still caked in mud.

Hi Firebird

Not a pleasant walk in the mud. He could have cleaned his wife's shoes as well but urgh self centred guy.

A few thoughts to tighten a little

their path had been muddy,
and he felt as if half was still with him.
he scraped off his boots, captial H after the full stop and delete - off
rubbed them in the grass
and by the morning, what was left
had started to flake off.
after a quiet breakfast, capital A after the full stop
he brushed away
what remained,
and polished his boots
until they shone,
then put them downnext to his wife’s
which were still caked in mud.

Could picture this well. Thanks for the read, enjoyed.

Definitely two ways to read this and I like them both. The surface read, with all the little open meanings, and then there's the deeper metaphorical read, the one with all the mud on it. I very much enjoyed Firebird.

Your duality is fantastic, Firebird. Wonderful piece, love.

I love the ambiguity of this and it's so fluid, not contrived at all.

Shadows, thank you for your edit - it was very useful.

Gumby, ChestersDaughter and Jane your comments were much appreciated.

Love,

Firebird