Thread: My passport photo

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Hi firebird

eeek! reminds me that my passport soon needs to be renewed and I'm dreading the photograph. I hate looking at pictures of myself.

A few thoughts, merely my perspective

how young I had once looked.
but I was pleased
to be exchanging it for a new one, I think you need to say photo rather than it
as I felt uneasy now
showing it to passport control:
with my long hair gone,
wrinkles beneath my eyes
and the skin between my jaw and neck sagging.
I wondered if they’d believe
I was that same person.
or just think I was stupid.
I knew though that these were only questions
I was asking myself;
and that photos were snapshots
that lived outside the continuity of time. new verse and delete - and
and when I received my new passport,
I was comforted by the thought
that in another ten years time
I’d think
how young I had once looked. good ending

Enjoyed this. Now where's that paper bag?

I really like the circular motion here. Great little twist in the end. I really enjoy the flow as well. Works well as one stanza, I think. One thing though; I realize some poets don't write with punctuation, but I'm always curious as to the reason. Any reason here?

This would be me, if I had a passport. I enjoyed the sentiment here Firebird. I do think that shadows suggestions are good ones, and improve the flow a bit.

Shadows, I have taken your advice. Many thanks for your input.

Squalid glass, I omit capitals because I often feel they inturrupt the flow of a piece and a new line doesn't need a capital to denote it. I also think that capitals are particularly redundant with enjambment (when a single sentence runs over from one line to another).

Gumbly, your comment are much appreciated.

Love and a Merry Christmas,

Firebird

I love the twist at the end, Firebird, very clever, but your stuff always is. Merry Christmas, love!