Thread: Repentatonic Limerick (advice)

the fifth part of the sole wood land series.
it is about how often we enjoy being lied to, and when we do we want it to be musical in a sense
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harmony is a home in my heart
dissonance is never gone

they gave concieved in me
a musical wrath

i concede
you were fooled by that song

we played it for you
honest i'm lying
the scale was repentatonic

accent on the fifth
our duet will descend

honest, i'm lying, honest

for i dabble in jazz
and never the blues
my days are as bright as they aren't

and I once believed
and still do to this day
i'd write a song and would rhyme the word orange

grasping for wind
like the 21st fret

the stretch will be worth my demise
what you've yet to see
and will in a second
i lied, yet you're still surprised

we played it for you
honest i'm lying
the scale was repentatonic

in the secret key of why
relative to see

only hearing
is to believe

when these gate close down
and these walls fall up

these crowds, won't keep me
they won't let up

if you'll listen i'l play
callus decay
i'll even still play if you

harmony is a home in my heart
dissonance is never gone

atonal is the way for me
never devoid of a song
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any advice..please.

Watto Eli

repentatonic scales-the first attempt in European Music to achieve equal temprement unfortunately it meant that an A flat was not identical to a G sharp. Bach however came up with a far better system.

Now to the poem, liked the Jazz/Blues reference because it makes a point, that though a lover of both since a child, I'd missed. The poem is a very rewarding if demanding read.

Regarding the first para you did say "the fifth part of the sole wood land series.
it is about how often we enjoy being lied to, and when we do we want it to be musical in a sense-the para was a musical lie

Brian

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Originally Posted by BrianRobertNeal

Watto Eli

repentatonic scales-the first attempt in European Music to achieve equal temprement unfortunately it meant that an A flat was not identical to a G sharp. Bach however came up with a far better system.

Now to the poem, liked the Jazz/Blues reference because it makes a point, that though a lover of both since a child, I'd missed. The poem is a very rewarding if demanding read.

Regarding the first para you did say "the fifth part of the sole wood land series.
it is about how often we enjoy being lied to, and when we do we want it to be musical in a sense-the para was a musical lie

Brian

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i've written four other poems besides these in this series...

thank you alot

I would like to know how this is a limerick.

Originally Posted by MisterSpider

I would like to know how this is a limerick.

since this is the fifth poem i called it a limerick, though it isn't

if each of my poems were a line this would be the fifth

i'm not one for convention any ways

thanks

how was the poem?