Thread: Snow: Past, Present and Plausible Future (EDIT 1)

This was wonderful before Lisa, but I do believe you've improved it and tightened it up a bit. Good work.

I love the contrasts and conflicts here. Starting with the personal memories had me emotionally invested in the poem so I was hit by the disaster you describe later. The way the future is presented as a solid reality, an inevitable outcome rather than one of many possibilities, adds power. I'm glad you've decided not to separate this into different pieces, it would be a crying shame.

Dear Joe, I can't thank you enough for your kind words. I admire your work greatly, poetry, prose and lyrics, so such a compliment from you mean a great deal.


Dear Cindy, Thank you for stopping back, love. Before Sync was kind enough to offer me a solution, this seemed too disconnected a mishmash for me to be satisfied with it. I am ever so pleased you like the edit.


Dear Jane, *Curtsies* thank you, milady. You took away exactly what I had hoped for but sorely missed the mark on with the original. I really didn't want to split it, either, but until Sync provided me with the best possible scenario to link all three tenses, I thought I would have to. I am so happy you enjoyed.

Thanks to you all, and to Sync yet again.

All my best,
Lisa