Thread: Gingerbread Man Revised

Well here it is, taking into consideration of Martin's critiques i *hopefully* made it better

Gingerbread Man -Revised-

Run n' Flee
No matter, I will catch thee
I eat your gumdrops
I tear off your legs
You wiggle and squirm just like a worm
Your cinnamon core is no more
Now I drown you in milk till' you cant breath
Rip out your eyes
And one by one
I eat them
I break your arms in two
And chomp and chew
Its down to your candy heart
what a bore
How little fun I had taring it apart
So I can drink its gore
Happy Halloween Little Gingerbread man