Thread: Gingerbread Man

run and flee
you can catch me i am the gingerbread man
i eat your gumdrops i tear off your legs
your cinnamon core is no more
i drown you in milk till you cant breath
i eat your eyes one by one
rip your arms in two
and chomp and chew
now its down to your candy heart
i rip it out and drink its red icing
happy Halloween little gingerbread man

PS: hope you enjoy

It makes me hungry.

Well, I thoroughly enjoy the vicious actions colliding with the sweet surface! Brings up notions of greed and primitive craving to me...

Second line confuses me a bit, like in just that single line it seems to be the gingerbread man that speaks?!

Second and third line doesn't really read without a comma, but I'll let it pass as a choice of style, just like the uncapped i's. Gives the whole thing a childish feel which fits well with the theme.

Second last line breaks the flow for me. What it says is cool, still I'd opt for some rewording...

All in all, good stuff. Poor little gingerbread man though

hehe thank you for the critiques - i'm brand new to poetry so really helps - ill take it back and try to re-wright it a little better XD and glad you enjoyed