Thread: Nevermore

I don't aspire to be a poet, but I thought I'd share one of mine with you anyway.
Forgive the naive repetition.


Nevermore

I hear the distant echo
of a song I knew before,
it hovers o'er the river
I swam in days of yore,
when enclosed me only sunshine
and all the world was mine,
'fore penury got its grip on me
in the dark'ning veil of time

I hear the distant echo
of a song I knew before,
it plays in attic treasure chests
my mind loved to explore,
when diamond chips and pirate ships
abounded on the main,
'fore my childhood dreams cried mutiny
now no mystery remains

I hear the distant echo
of a song I knew before,
it swings on oak tree pendulums
I tied before the war
'tween a young boy's dreams of flying
and an old man's hopes of dying,
and with time's speed multiplying
'til the clock tic tocs no more

I hear the distant echo
of a song I knew before,
so I'll ramble on
and sing my song
and regard not nevermore

I enjoyed this. It is well written and, to me, it reads like a song with the repetition at the beginning of each stanza. That old days of yore expression works well. Welcome to the forum, Ifmyante.

my best, apple

Thanks for the kind words and welcome, apple. Much appreciated

I liked it as well, and the repetition worked. I don't normally like rhyming, but I thought this flowed very well.

Welcome, Ifmyante. I wish all non-aspiring poets wrote this well. This flows beautifully, your rhymes are not forced and the repetition works wonders, and getting repetition to work in your favor is no small feat. Loved S2 in entirety as well as "oak tree pendulums". My only nit is that I believe tic toc should be tick tock. Looking forward to reading more of your work.

Best,
Lisa

I like the old world feel that this has, the language enhanced the content very well. Well done Michael.