Thread: Melonie

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Is this what mothers go through?

I love this you're amazing Gumby!

Thank you Eli, that's very sweet.

Really like this one . Chained by day, a different creature by night. I think we all on some level want that kind of freedom, to escape commitments and let our imagination go crazy (which is the vibe I'm getting).

Thought these lines were really strong,

Pillows can't smother the maniac's mutters,
believe me, I would know.

You should join my rap crew...lol

Hey, thanks caelum for your comments here. I found your take on this very interesting and can only agree that we all would like a little of the freedom you spoke of. Thanks again.

Eli, you really would not want me rapping with your crew. My talent for rap is zip. But thanks for the thought.

At first I thought Melopmene was just an absolutely beautiful name but something told me look it up in Wiki. Daughter of Zeus, goddess of Tragedy. And you certainly portray tragedy. I don't know how I can avoid adressing the pshychological here in this finely wrought interpretive poem.

She's slipped her chain, picked the lock
crept past the guards again.
There will be no sleep tonight-
a mad man's muse is on the loose.

As I see it, in the very beginning, you set the stage for one's inner defense mechanisms against the very dark rumblings of mind, escaped. Your metaphor of prison couldn't be more appropriate and compeling.

thank God for mind numbing chores.

Something I embrace.

Cindy, I'm sure you don't have to wonder why I take to this poem. Excellent!

Thank you Laurie, you are exactly spot on in your take on this. Glad you enjoyed.

I see what you did there with that Title.

It came more apparent when I read the poem more. The girl that was being describe was perfect, and the title made it even more so.

thank God for mind numbing chores.

I disagree with that, but then again I don't have to go through what the poem is talking about.

Dark yet cheeky. I loved it.
Alliteration stays in my mind forever, so I know I'll catch myself many times in the future mentally chanting the mantra 'A madman's muse is on the loose'

Thanks for that

The nut house, the patient, the porter all rolled into one container. One dose of lobotomy by day, a free- for- all by night. I love it Gumby. Very well done.

Hi bearycool, thanks so much for commenting here. Glad you've never had to embrace mind numbing chores as some of us do.

Michael, dark and cheeky is good. so glad you enjoyed, sorry if it planted one of those unending repeats that drive you crazy all day.

Thank you Sondra, I really appreciate your kind words, and glad you caught the porter reference, wasn't sure if anyone got that.

Don't be sorry. 'The silken sad uncertain rustling of each purple curtain thrilled me' is gladly replaced. Yours is far more catchy!

I love this Cindy, you clever, clever girl. I caught porter just fine also. Ifmyante is right about that line, both catchy and memorable. Again, you've succeeded in brilliantly constructing a veritable gem. I could just kiss you for that final line, a more appropriate truth has never been uttered. Thank God for mops and frying pans, or else that lunatic would be wreaking havoc all the day through. Ugh, could you just imagine *shudder*. You did a bang up job, love.

Michael, great... now I'm going to have your line running through my head all day.

Lisa, I was sure you'd catch that porter reference, as I'm aquainted with some of your 'baggage'. Glad you enjoyed this one, as she insisted I write it, before she would let me sleep.