Thread: When Feelings Come

Descent:

My Lord,

I feel the blood coming down,
falling toward parts unknown.
For when the feelings come, all
I can do is fall and slip away.

cold
__ stale
____ hopeless
_____ descent

cradle to the earth in chilling embrace,
the mist in my eyes fogs away reality.
For when the feelings come, all
I can do is fall and slip away.

_______ descent
________ despair
_________ and
__________ crying
____________ death

ad infinitum is how long I fall,
all alone and cold forever now.
for when the feelings come, all
I can do is fall and slip away.

_ down
__ and
____ down
_____ to
______ parts
_______ unknown

Ascent:

Until you grab me from my chilled
despair will be when I return.
and when That Day comes
is when the feelings will come
and instead lift me up high.

_______________ hope
______________ light
____________ and
___________ warming
_________ strength

The Day has come, you have
grabbed my frozen entomb hands
and now when the feelings come
I feel the manna of heaven feel me.

_____ love
____ beauty
___ calm
__ and
_ restful
peace

ad infinitum is how long I'll stand.
As long as You, my Lord, stand with
me when the feelings come once again.

Some of the lines were cliche, especially the reference to fog.

cold
__ stale
____ hopeless
_____ descent

I am not a fan of religious sentiment in poems. I think you found a challenging theme to tackle. It seems hard to write objectionablly about it which is what I suggest you do. Otherswise seems a little hard to immerse into the piece and appreciate it.