Thread: Beat

Originally Posted by bearycool

Very sensual poem like Gumpy said. The descriptive words made me feel like I was there.

But I have a question, why are the words space out like that in the line of the poem? I haven't seen poetry like that before, or lately like it I suppose.

The format is for visual effect and to provide longer pauses, like a stage direction for reading aloud. Thanks for the comment.

Originally Posted by Scarlett_156

The girl on before me
Puts that damned resin on her hands
So she can thrill the onlookers
With gravity-defying headstands.

To take out a towel and wipe
Decreases my tips!
But I can't stand getting that stuff
On my face, hands, and... er... hips.

Once this ordeal is over
I'll pop a cold Miller.
By my eyes! This poetry-reading stuff
Can be a right killer.

(That means I liked your poem! )

Thanks