Ondes Martenot

**MisterSpider** · 10-21-2010, 10:36 PM

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**Scarlett_156** · 10-22-2010, 02:27 AM

I've discovered that my life is much more unencumbered now that I've had that procedure, THANK GOD. (lol)

**apple** · 10-22-2010, 08:11 PM

Very cute. I enjoyed it very much, but don't bring your head near me, I love cheese. It goes well with apples.

my best,
apple

**Gumby** · 10-22-2010, 11:49 PM

Oh, I like this one.

Very fun feeling to it MisterSpider.

**SilverMoon** · 10-23-2010, 12:29 AM

What a way to go! To free one's thoughts, the ever nagging ones. You took me on quite an Other Worldy journey. Did you at least bring us back some little Laughing Cow cheese wedges? Or do we have to pick your brain?!

I liked! Laurie

**Martin** · 10-23-2010, 02:34 PM

This is expertly written - rhythm and rhymes are flawless I'd say. The cheese bit of course ties well in with the theme and as a wacky metaphor, though for me the dominating part was the eerie vibe created initially by the title and the first line together. But how original to kick off a poem with an instrumental ambiance. Before I even opened the post, I was suspecting Mars attacks from this one...

Very much enjoyed. And welcome back btw.

Martin

**MisterSpider** · 10-24-2010, 08:53 PM

Thank you Silver Apples of the Moon, Scarlett Apples of the Sun. And Gumby and Martin.

**Chester's Daughter** · 10-24-2010, 09:23 PM

Thank you for teaching me something new, I had to look up Ondes Martenot, how so very clever of you to open with such. I must echo Martin regarding the flawless construction, a truly exceptional job. As to content, loved it, especially the image of the cerebellum dribbling out, I'm a morbid thing. Gee, how I wish I had a mind of brie, it would make like so easy. Much enjoyed, MisterSpider.

Best,
Lisa

**MisterSpider** · 10-27-2010, 11:43 PM

THank you, Lisa. You don't normally comment on my poems, so thank you.

**JosephB** · 10-28-2010, 12:21 PM

Heh. This is very clever and precise. Well done.

**Nellie** · 10-28-2010, 04:14 PM

MisterSpider,

Ha! Ha! If you've had your brain replaced with Brie, then you definitely have a bunch of holes in your head, huh?

Honestly, though, a fun poem to read. And btw, I did have brain surgery years ago. My cerebellum is still in tack but at times I do feel like my brain is cheese 'cause I have difficulty finding words at times.

Cindy

**Tenebris** · 10-28-2010, 05:15 PM

Not a critique to offer. I have read through this piece several times over the past few days, and actually thought I had commented on it, but I guess there is more cheese in my head than I had thought. Very well-written and instantly classic.

T