Thread: Just a mammal (Warning - high levels of testosterone!)

My women think I'm a lion;
the messy blond hair, a mane
so in my kiss I bite 'em -
discipline and make tame.

At night I tell all my stories
to keep in good faith, my flock.
Can't have this lion's ewes
find that he's but a dog.

A girl once thought me a dolphin;
a few tears I might have shed -
told her more of my ocean
and caught her in my net.

Whether wiggle, gallop or growl
do what I must to get fed.
Come morning in my kennel:
zoo's closed, now go on, GET.

ahahha

I like this a lot!

I liek the opening to the dolphin stanza. but you lost me in translation.

the lion stanza frist is a real good hook.

Men! I enjoyed your animial approach to charming the girls. A very fun poem and quite unique. Good work, Martin.

First of all; you sly dog! There are so many men I think of, you've captured them perfectly! Only one thing catches me as I'm reading. The skip from lion analogy to bird in the second verse. You could use 'pride' instead. It holds a double meaning that suits as well.

Originally Posted by Martin

At night I tell all my stories
to keep in good faith, my flock. (Pride)
Can't have my lionesses
find that I'm but a dog.

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- Katie D

Martin - Who would have thought, you little devil! A delight to read. But if you write a romantic poem, I dare not trust it! Laurie

Martin,

You are just a mammal. Nice poem.

Now I have one for you.

I love this, Martin, especially that last line. Goodness dear, I never took you for a cad.Seriously, doll, you've started a trend and prompted responses from both Cindy (Nellie) and I. You said the other day you'd like us to have some silly poetry to play with, thanks for getting the ball rolling. This is really so clever. Much enjoyed.

Thanks all.

Thought I'd get away with flock as a sheep analogy. Then something instead of "dog" should rhyme with "pride"..?

But really, I'm just practising working with beats and more fixed rhyming schemes here!