Thread: Collecting People

Dolls lined on shelves
in binary code;
four hundred numbers
for presentation
profiled for public
consumption.

But being bought and sold is fun
(or so I am told), shuffling statistics
with a master that stares back from the glow.

And the dealer is generous;
you will never want for a fix,
when the itch for your abyss
becomes inconvenient to resist.

Loud airports, sheik salons,
cheap restaurants, hip cafes;
the plastic benches at the clinic
or the library at school;
you never have to leave your house
because home fits nicely in a pocket.
Besides, that number to your left
is also reviewing his collection.






Note: This is recently written, but written in a style I abandoned a while back. Kind of fun to revisit though. If you choose to comment, let me know if it is effective.

Ah, this reminds me a great deal of Facebook and other like devilries. I do not think that I have one critique to offer you. This is an instant classic and makes me laugh on the inside...mainly because it is one in the morning and laughing out loud might wake someone. Very well written, and a style worth using.



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Oh how I love this, Edge. The sentiment is simply grand, sometimes I think my kids will be sucked into Facebook. Whatever happened to "hanging out" with real people in real places? I don't bother with such nonsense, lookee me, I got four thousand friends, but I've only met three of them. You can bet I'll be passing this around the dinner table tonight. As for the style, it may not be exactly your usual, but it still "feels" like you. Not sure if that is what you want to hear, but it works regardless. Not a nit to these eyes. Fine work, indeed.

Hey Edge, long time no read. I really like this piece, its short, affective and fun to read. The fun is especially good, seeing as the subject matter is about the devil himself! Ok... maybe not quite, but close. I like the style your using, it reminds me of some of the old things you used to post, but its still comprehensible to lowly peasants like me. I particularly liked:
"Dolls lined on shelves
in binary code;"

good imagery and it makes me want to write some geeky poetry!