Thread: "What is best for man."

COPYRIGHT 2010 Michael C. Thompson

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what's done is done
as easy as made
like pencil to paper
writes words to erase
a story is finished
'fore even it starts
an ending is written
in all of men's hearts
a whisper unheeded
advice left to rot
what is best for man
men can know not
the gods try to beckon
some to the call heed
Death is not what man wants
but it is what man needs.

Another delicious read. Would have preferred punctuation, but again, it's your baby. The slant rhyme of made/erase is a bit of a stretch, especially since the others are so exact, but otherwise I really liked this. Love those last two lines. Well done.

Best,
Lisa

I took the line from the Oracle of Delphi, who claimed to issue this very statement from the mind of the sun god Apollo himself!

I enjoyed it, as well as the message. However, I think the last two lines could use a tweaking.

Death is not what man wants
but it is what man needs. <---- this doesn't flow as well as the rest. What if you used a "just" instead of an "is"

Death is not what man wants
but it's just what man needs.

Thanks for the input, I like the way my version sounds better however.