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    Out walking

    She looks back
    and I can tell she’s more interested in a stranger
    than me.
    She asks me why we are still together.
    What is there left of us worth saving.
    I can’t help but notice that that man is there,
    and he’s catching us.
    I say come on let’s just enjoy the day together
    and see how we feel later.
    Let's slow down a little? she says.
    We’re not in a rush are we?
    I tell her that we should keep our distance
    from that man,
    because if he caught us
    he might want to talk
    and then we’d be stuck with him.
    Last edited by Firebird; 09-23-2010 at 10:09 PM.

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