Thread: Static Pleasure

Static Pleasure

The crisp buzz of static promises
bombarding the senses like a stirred swarm of hornets.
Hollow whispers soaring on corruption's breath
and alighting on wistful limbs,
plaguing their natures with a parasitic postulate.

Branches rustling and undulating like windswept hair,
splayed out in the infinite chasm of life.
Struggling, clinging, grasping,
begging for that which is not to come.
That which is mind not body.
What is and isn't.

With bone crunching cracks, those enlightened derelicts
are liberated through swift debilitation, careening
through the grasp of delusional, honeyed fingers,
avoiding eternal charm's seductive caress.

Befittingly of those who brave the bubbling
wellsprings of scalding truths, the misty embrace
of tainted pleasure ignores their writhing presence.
Mocked by those comforted in a sensual pall of deceit.
Their forms sinking into the mud as the sun trembles on horizon's end
rinsing and bathing among worms where freedom
exists in its pallid dwelling.

Where the static can't find them.

Hey, Banana Brother, thought this was very strong. I took it as being about modern-day electronics, computers and tvs etc.? If so, I often wonder what it would be like to get far, far away from computers and ipods. Or just wonder what life must have been like before electricity.
-cae

Thank you for the comment caelum. You're spot on with your interpretation. There are too many times I see people engrossed in these false realities, these constructions of theirs, that I can't help but feel revolted by the static.

Some very strong images here, this one particularly caught my imagination with the picture it gave me. Good work.

Branches rustling and undulating like windswept hair,
splayed out in the infinite chasm of life.
Struggling, clinging, grasping,
begging for that which is not to come.
That which is mind not body.
What is and isn't.

I freaking love this, Banana Brother, the aural quality is marvelous. You've got some serious sounds going on, sir, kudos. You most certainly know your way around my favored devices. Love the message also. One nit, remove the period after end in S4. This is probably just me, but I kept wanting to eliminate the tree before limbs in S1, it just reads better to me without it. It's a bit heavy on "ing" but somehow I get the feeling that may be intentional. Enjoyed this to the extreme, BB, and am awaiting your next offering with bated breath.

Best,
Lisa

@Gumby: I thank you for reading it and for the kind comment. : )

@CD: Thank you for the kind comment! I always seem drawn to sounds and music in my poetry and other writings. Perhaps it is my musician coming out as I write? I wish I could make my music sound half as good as it does in my writing! Thanks for catching that period. I was having trouble with the use of tree in stanza one. Originally I had tree in, but I liked it better without it, but then I feared that people would be unsure of what I was referring to. I think I shall take it out. People will probably understand when they read "Branches" in S2. The -ings were indeed intentional. Thank you for reviewing my work, and for the delightful comments! : )

BB, this crackles with sensual movement. Good subtle alliteration, rhythmic, good word choices, and some memorable imagery. Enjoyed this.