Thread: All That Glistens

A simple cuff of roses
A thought of thorns
wide tooth filled smile
my insight of scorn

But you continue to stare
and ponder me friend
I am only but a stranger

whom wishes your end.

This is very different to other poems of yours that I've read. It's very much more polished. A dark and thought provoking poem indeed.

Vicki

I see that writing class has done a lot for you, Davis.
We should talk sometime about things. Hope you're cool. Or at least cooler than you used to be. Haa.

I agree with the general consensus, soundly constructed, great content and much enjoyed. Nicely done, MeeQ.

A short, sharp knife to the heart. I like it.

Originally Posted by MeeQ

But you continue to stare
and ponder me friend
I am only but a stranger

whom wishes your end.

I read that if a person stares at you for longer than 6 seconds, they either want to sleep with you, or kill you. I guess we know what one of these people wants. Not too sure about the other. Intriguing little poem, MeeQ.

Well isn't this just the place to be, all too kind.
I wrote this on the bus after some old as death human started trying to shake my hand (whilst talking to himself I must add). After I ignored him he just stared at me. Life is good.

As for my writing class Kath, yes i learned a few tips and tricks. Teacher was good, everyone else wouldn't talk to me. (I don't blame them, considering i read 'Rag Patched Legs' aloud)

V-Gogh, I'm stealing that for a short story. Your presence here is always welcome.

Gumby, I prefer long knives; I am after all Australian.

Miss Daughter, Your thought is by far one of the only ones I respect, thank you.

S, Glad it reads as I intended.

Hi, stranger. So glad to see you about! Wish I could get much across using such an economy of words!

A simple cuff of roses
A thought of thorns

The more I read this, the more I fell in love with it. Outstanding imagery, and nearly contrasting which makes for great impact.

Hope you stick around! Laurie

Haha, liked the finish here, MeeQ. That cracked me up. Separating it by another line just added that much more emphasis.
-cae