Thread: Numb Connections

Droves and droves,
faces, crooked necks,
lit in a blue glow.

Manipulating screens,
pressing keys.

Plugged in.

The face to face
day, lost -- replaced,
by a book of the face,
by a text in it's place.

By a friend who ignores you,
by toneless messages,
and numb connections.

I like it. I think if you lose the capitals at the start of each line, and add punctuation it would read smoother and stronger.

I think you captured what our cubicle-society can be like very eloquently. Crooked necks and the light of screens, and the way there's less face to face contact. Thanks for the read.
-cae

wow Gumby, it makes a huge difference! This is why i love this place! Thanks alot.

Glad you liked it caelum, and thanks for reading.

Love this, Jon, you've tackled one of my pet peeves. Technology is progressively erasing human contact, very sad indeed. I found this piece to be very cleverly constructed, kudos, sir.

Best,
Lisa

Hahah ya, it can be annoying, and kinda sad. Was unintentionally people watching at college and so came the inspiration to write this.

Thanks for the kind words Lisa.