You go exceptionally dark, here. And you know I'm a sucker for that! Really well done. What I would give thought to is replacing "Rapunzel's golden hair", working it out some other way. I think it disturbs the chiseled and aphotic imagery, so well managed in the poem. The ending, a great hit! Laurie
Last edited by SilverMoon; 09-11-2010 at 06:33 PM.
"Blessed are the cracked, for they shall let in the light" Groucho Marxhttp://www.punksoulpoet.com/2011/04/inspired-by-the-artist-andrea-wch/#top"Emalyne"
http://www.motleypress.artandsole.org.uk/Issue1opt.PDF
"No Forgiveness for the Chrysalis"
Thank you Laurie, I always appreciate your take on things.
Gumby - I'm not a poet so can't really comment except to say: nicely done. Invoked emotions.
Let's do the Time Warp again -- RHPS
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