Thread: Infomercial For the Unemployed

Welcome to the Jigsaw;

we take pride in picking
only the choicest pieces
to stuff straight down
your pretty neck.

Our Russian Roulette
is well regarded,
certain to work
in at least one-sixth
of all instances,
and the secret to our success
is so well guarded
even our competitors
struggle to tell the difference!

Testimonials looped around the block,
no actor can pull off such a desperate role,
and don't dare suggest we'd ever lie
those strings are pulled quite honestly.

Yet here you beg us yet again,
praised be our good fortune and honest means;
we see you salivating for that scrap.
Honor our generosity.

and trust that we've got what you need.

You never disappoint, Edgewise, which whatever I have read by you. The language is positively content, which gives a perfect effect on the reader. The only thing I would object to is the rhythm, which - being quite broken in the second stanza especially - can be quite distracting.

Our Russian Roulette
is well regarded,
certain to work
in at least one-sixth
of all instances,

I love this! Clearly well thought out.

Overall, another job well done, Edgewise!

I really hear what you're saying here Edge, and you say it so well. Many layers, I like that. This stanza really held a bite, to me.

Testimonials looped around the block,
no actor can pull off such a desperate role,
and don't dare suggest we'd ever lie
those strings are pulled quite honestly.

The welcome had a bright start. A spark of humor, too. Then followed the whole system of a line of duty... or activity that was echoed nicely.

I especially love the first stanza and the second one.