Thread: The Wanderer

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This has a very 'fantasy' feel about it, almost sci-fi. I could see a fabulous illustration in my mind when I read it, of the whole saga happening like an old legend story.

Thanks, Gumby.

And yeah, when I made it I was aiming for a kind of fantasy-esque saga feel, so I'm glad it came across that way. The guy's kind of a wandering warrior.

It made me think of the unbeatable Sun, while the f, here and there, of fire.
Enjoyable rhyme, c.

Hi Caelum,

I like the character in the poem. Bold, fearless and much of a wanderer (which was apt for a poem's title). My imagination took me back to days where men fought with swords and spears. No canons, no gunpowders.

My fav:
'The greatest pleasure I keep is teaching them they're wrong'.


Well-penned piece.

Fox.

caelum, your poem of the valient hero had a wonderful feel of duskiness. And your ryhme and meter outstanding. I happen to be poor in this department but I know when I hear the good. And I liked your moral:

And to this day I walk and prey
On those who think they're strong
The greatest pleasure that I keep
Is teaching them they're wrong

A very certain pleasure to read. Laurie

It reads like a story of Norse Mythology. Maybe you could adapt it to tell a famous Norse story, with a little research. I think this would make a very good song, if someone were to adapt these as lyrics to a piece of music.

Reminds me of a movie I saw recently called Pathfinder. You were right to use first-person, it reads well as dialogue.

Good job, younger version of caelum!

I am literally trembling with joy at your flawless meter, Caelum. Such a difficult task so expertly handled deserves applause=D>. You really should write more poetry, my dear. Your word choices definitely lend to an old world feel that is quite appealing, very much like a saga from days gone by as has already been said. The bite of the final stanza is a perfect wrap-up and simply superb. I truly hope you will be sharing more of these with us. Excellent work!

Best,
Lisa

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