Thread: See The Light.

Every night I never know what tomorrow will bring
I wake up confident of only one thing.
The days will continue to be long
And my mind, reminding me to stay strong.

Its so hard to make it through
When the only thing you feel is blue.
The sun may shine its rays
But I never see it on the clearest of days.

Its not easy trying to see what youll become
When every part of your body is lingering on numb.
The one thought on my mind
Is trying not to fall behind.

I might still be around
But what happens when I hit the ground?
Will I need to pray
God can you help me make it through each day?

A thoughtful write. We all need upliftment of the soul, mind and body. Someone once told me that it's hard being human; harder being the things we want to become. That you have elegantly mentioned in your poem.

Somewhere in your first stanza cut my eyes and I will simply make a suggestion which hopefully, you wouldn't see as provocative or demeaning. Please your work is nice and my suggestion is from a personalized angle. Here I go then:

'The days will continue to be long...'

The stretch of time symbolized by 'will' seems to inject another feel of literal meaning to 'days'. I guess you are trying to refer to the coming days as burdensome. So in that case, I suggest 'are' in place of 'will'. Eg: The days are long. Or maybe, write if you mean you are hopeful of days to come:

'The days will continue to come...'

Why I have picked particularly on that line is that not all days scientifically and naturally are long.

Apart from that, I enjoyed the read.

Hi galigator, a very fine contemplative poem. A very real one.

You need to capitalize the first line of each stanza and keep the rest lower case unless you're begining a sentence. e.g.

Every night I never know what tomorrow will bring
I wake up confident of only one thing.
The days will continue to be long
and my mind reminds me to stay strong

And I happen to like this line!

When every part of your body is lingering on numb.

I would suggest going over each stanza keeping suggestions in mind for a better flow. Great poem! Laurie