Thread: Security

Security


A baby rests her head on mother's breast,
her face aglow and eyes which shine so bright;
the world so busy, while in peaceful rest,
a baby rests her head on mother's breast.
Enfolded in security, so blessed,
where comfort can put any fear to flight,
a baby rests her head on mother's breast,
her face aglow and eyes which shine so bright.

The form captures nicely a mother's sentiment. And in content, brilliantly so as well...

Upon first read it did not dawn on me that your little infant could have been the inspiration for this poem which touches me even more.

the world so busy, while in peaceful rest,
a baby rests her head on mother's breast

I liked these two lines, especially. The contrast between "busy" and "rest". If we could only remember those times of ultimate peace. Laurie

Thank you so much for your kind comments.

Vicki

The form works really well with the subject to create the feeling in this one.

The poem uphold a natural bond between a mother and her child. The comfort to dispels any sort of fear.

Emotional piece, Lady.

The form is a triolet and it's the first I've ever tried. They're fun and I may well try some more. This one was written on the spur of the moment. I think the pattern works with the content to give a kind of lullabye feel. This is done by the form itself rather than my skill.

Thank you for the encouraging comments.

Vicki

Thanks for letting know. Very interesting form. I saw it from the mother's perspective, how she is entranced with her resting baby, and thus the mindful repeating.

this is a very pretty poem. I love your flow and you make the rhymes feel so natural. I really enjoyed this.

Originally Posted by SvirVolgate

this is a very pretty poem. I love your flow and you make the rhymes feel so natural. I really enjoyed this.

Thank you for that.

Originally Posted by Martin

Thanks for letting know. Very interesting form. I saw it from the mother's perspective, how she is entranced with her resting baby, and thus the mindful repeating.

My own baby, Niamh, is the inspiration for the words but the repetition comes from the form. Where does that leave us?

I saw a baby doing this, hand gently laid across his mother's shoulder, eyes bright and full of wonder, snuggled safely away from the all new world. Very nice.

Originally Posted by vangoghsear

I saw a baby doing this, hand gently laid across his mother's shoulder, eyes bright and full of wonder, snuggled safely away from the all new world. Very nice.

Thanks

The form of triolet so very well compliments your choice of theme. For me, the image inspired is so beautiful it borders on being sacred, for at least three of mine. My second son never slept so something this soothing just doesn't apply. Lovely verse, Vicki, thanks so much for sharing.

The theme and form combined give this a very innocent feel. Very appropriate for a mother and daughter bond. Great for a first attempt at that form.

Edit: Lisa somehow posted before me and made my comment superfluous. Not that I was saying anything others haven't alluded to, anyway.

Thank you for the encouraging words, Lisa and Patrick.