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    Apprentice Kamisama's Avatar
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    Panda Shirt

    There I saw a goddess

    Sure perhaps some normal woman
    Standing out in the open
    Showing her intelligence and rhetoric to the world
    Something overpowered me to get close to her.

    Wow.

    Black hair
    A love for nature
    A desire to save the world
    And a shirt with a panda bear

    There I saw a goddess

    Not some Wiccan witch
    Who had this personality of a bitch
    the kind who would ditch you

    I just remember looking at her
    I could feel a beat in my heart
    She was definitely a work of art

    Maybe it was this aggressive side
    The kind I saw inside
    her office room with the posting of the
    bullet holes in targets she didn't hide

    Maybe it was her love for animals
    Or the rock climbing
    or the spirit of adventure she has...

    Wow.

    Wondering how to talk to her
    Observing her movements
    Wondering how to say, "I thought someone like you didn't exist."

    I don't remember the last time
    I was crazy and out of my mind
    She was the goddess I would never find

    It's too bad that she saw me
    point a gun to my head
    and pull the trigger
    wishing I were dead
    because of all the pain I must endure
    as I attempt to refrain

    I would have given her
    My love
    My heart
    My everything

    She made me feel
    like a giddy
    little
    boy

    *bang*

    And then in my rampage of hate and loneliness I forever endure, I continued the path of world destruction I had before I met her.
    Last edited by Kamisama; 06-08-2010 at 12:10 PM.

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    Prolific Writer MaggieG's Avatar
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    First Hun... Capping each line is an antiquated rule that is no longer necessarily. Secondly ... She made my feel I assume that is spose to be "me" not "my" .

    Third ... I found the content fascinating, and a rather good story. You have some excellent turns of phrase in here.

    Even though my pups decided to go to war with each other, and wake me from a dead sleep lol I did enjoy this read

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