This comes from a juicy, joyous and creative place and the images it conjures are delightful. However the style is over-written and somewhat self indulgent, as if there is an effort to be 'poetic' in presentation rather than give the reader the essence of the experience in as direct a way as possible. To develop your style will require extra effort in the writing process. The effort involves rumination and discrimination, a process where the old bromides of 'less is more' and 'show don't tell' can have their play.
Seagulls descry this as their citadel,
colossal rock thrones where they alight to rest
only for a moment before taking wing
Seagull citadels, colossal rock thrones
where they alight, only to take wing
Art has its best chance to happen when heartfelt experience is married with conscious craft.
Hope this is helpful.