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    The Anatomy of a Woman's Religion ( Adult Subject Matter )

    ( I have mentioned previously that I have written in this style before. The genre is known as " feminine ecriture " It is a body conscious form of political writing. I also borrowed heavily from the surrealist style as well. )

    We are a chronic chirotony
    of dexter,and sinister speak;
    fingertips dipped, stained
    in the dying days of still, and moving expressions.

    Write upon the souls of men,
    powerfully, and divine.
    Never confess to anyone your sin.
    Declare, "They are mine !"

    Walk along the forearm of our strengths,
    and decipher the blue scribblings.
    Your weaknesses washed out letters,
    misinterpreting the text.

    Woman reads only as Womb,
    to you...
    Venter scrolls through thin parchment
    of membrane, just to be written in bones.

    We are a compulsive aperture
    of clefted lyrics. Language
    screams and dreams, reborn
    from the water of our dialect.

    It is Our Christ, Our Buddha.
    Because no one , NO ONE
    bears these translations,
    this unique stigmata except we.

    Be not only Eve, lady womb.
    Look also to Lilith,and Jezebel.
    Revive men from the tomb,
    only to describe to them their Hell.

    Turn the thigh, like a page.
    Crowley is recorded there,
    where "Leah" mothers uteri,

    and Shakespeare's "Stage"
    is a vagina; a stolen work
    in handwritten script,
    a glyph on torn skin.

    Canthus', once blurry, and wet
    are dry,and angry now.
    Because someone closed our Bible,
    leaving nothing to learn,
    but unending bearded dogma.

    We are a possessed palate,
    roofed in the bone - hard.
    Ejaculating sentences, we dare
    you to cover this mouth.

    Our lust was the author of the Causeway.
    The Henge’s, book-price for our sighs.
    Red bulls are the effect you paid,
    just to proof the novel of our eyes.

    And the hands, the hands extend
    outward, and upward, muscled
    along the tap tap steps of Heaven,
    where God exposes the female sex, bellowing

    " Take note, write it down ! "
    and we do ...naked, and unashamed.
    Every word is nailed,
    edged with our palms.

    Menorrhea is a burning spear,
    dipped in the adjective of cold shame.
    We will erase your liquid pronouns
    from flesh's font, and impale a different brand.

    Female... Found... Fire ...

    We are a surviving epidermis
    of biography,a bind of taut.
    And you will no longer
    hide that upon your shelf.

    Breasts are printed bold.
    Study them with the respect of a student.
    They are not pretty icons
    for you to thumb through.

    We will ledger your heart upon our hip,
    and let it cipher for that place,
    as we edit the tip of it,
    and read the look upon your face.

    Footnote this anatomy if you can,
    this catechism of holy-tongued religion.
    I tell you , " You never will !"

    Unless you are a woman ...

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    I would love to comment on this, but dear lord I'm speachless! Awesome comes to mind. I've read this several times myself, and I still can't absorb all of it's meanings. This one will take me a while Maggie.

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    Quote Originally Posted by iDrew View Post
    Oh god Yeah.

    For me this is what might happen if Sylvia Plath and Kathy Acker sat down and wrote a poem together.

    I need to really read this a few more times as each time I read it a find something new. It certainly has the dynamics of a good performance piece.

    xDrew



    *smiles*

    My husband says I am Germaine Greer, and Torey Hayden mixed. My father used to tell me I was Mark Twain when he was a steam boat captain, and there were no genteel ladies around ! lol

    A friend of mine actually read this in public ( *smirks* brave woman ! ) It does vocalize well.

    I thank you much for the read Hun

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    I don't know.

    Who is your audience? To whom are you speaking? That's what I kept asking myself.

    Also, it feels very preachy.

    Setting yourself, as the narrator 'apart' feels preachy to me. You are not speaking of yourself or relating a story to move your reader into understanding, but you are lecturing.

    I understand that you are probably directing this toward a certain audience, but it shoves away.

    Have you ever read the work of Ai?

    http://www.poets.org/viewmedia.php/prmMID/16453

    It's so real it hurts, sends chills up the spine. But yet, it empowers.

    God that woman is good.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Gumby View Post
    I would love to comment on this, but dear lord I'm speachless! Awesome comes to mind. I've read this several times myself, and I still can't absorb all of it's meanings. This one will take me a while Maggie.
    *laughs*

    As I said Hun it is a genre ( Far better known in French writing than here strangely enough. I thought America was the home of the Femi-Nazis as my Da used to say so eloquently. lol ) I play with this type of writing on occasion. It is interesting writing in the sense that it leaves "feminine politeness" at the door, giving you the freedom to get a tad more specific, and not dance around thoughts.

    Truth ? At times I still read it , and think " Damn Straight ! " Then on other occasions I am left thinking " Damn ! This thing is a mess ! " LOL

    But as I said it is fun to go messing with .

    Thank you for the read Hun

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    Quote Originally Posted by ms. vodka View Post
    I don't know.

    Who is your audience? To whom are you speaking? That's what I kept asking myself.

    Also, it feels very preachy.

    Setting yourself, as the narrator 'apart' feels preachy to me. You are not speaking of yourself or relating a story to move your reader into understanding, but you are lecturing.

    I understand that you are probably directing this toward a certain audience, but it shoves away.

    Have you ever read the work of Ai?

    http://www.poets.org/viewmedia.php/prmMID/16453

    It's so real it hurts, sends chills up the spine. But yet, it empowers.

    God that woman is good.
    Yes ... I have read Ai. Years ago when she did a lot of internet posting. I found the piece you put up a good read. As female writers go I am far more inclined to Carol Ann Duffy, and Louise Gluck.

    The audience ? This was actually written for a specific audience , a fundraiser for a local woman's shelter. So I can certainly see where it would not be everyone's cup of tea. Hell ! For the most part it is not even my cup of tea. LOL But it did go over decently for what it was written for, a group of women who thought they were not understood for a variety of reasons, and at the time lacked a "voice" of power.

    Yeah... It was a lecture of sorts. Excellent way of putting it .

    Thanks for the read Hun

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    In that context, that it was written for a fundraiser for a local women's shelter it does work very well!

    Thanks for giving me that background.

    In that light, it is a very powerful piece.

    Jenifer

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    Quote Originally Posted by ms. vodka View Post
    In that context, that it was written for a fundraiser for a local women's shelter it does work very well!

    Thanks for giving me that background.

    In that light, it is a very powerful piece.

    Jenifer
    This is a good example of what I have never liked about writing for specific audiences. You are giving them what they want ( or on this occasion what you think they might need ) very much narrowing options, and even in some sense ideas. It limits your expression of you,( although it can very much expand your horizons beyond your own back door so to speak ) and I am just arrogant enough to think it should always be about me *smirking a very cheeky smirk*

    You get the idea Hun Thanks

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    OoooH! Maggie....

    You are such a big turn on right now, you make me want to ditch my wife and go and explore that treasure trove of anatomy you call WOMAN.
    By God you are some woman. You have my insides doing flips at the thought of exploring your seductive body.. LOL.

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    Grrrrrrow! Down boy!

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    Quote Originally Posted by wacker View Post
    OoooH! Maggie....

    You are such a big turn on right now, you make me want to ditch my wife and go and explore that treasure trove of anatomy you call WOMAN.
    By God you are some woman. You have my insides doing flips at the thought of exploring your seductive body.. LOL.

    wacker
    Leave it to a damn Irishman ! LMAO ! My father would love you !

    Thank you for the laugh Darlin

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    Actually, it's a fairly supbar piece. You wail about being a woman and hate against men. Consider for one second that you are a man.

    I do understand a woman finding herself. This is important, especially considering the history of the last 50 years. Even in finding ourselves, do we not also have to consider others?
    Last edited by Reese; 06-07-2010 at 08:38 PM.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Gumby View Post
    Grrrrrrow! Down boy!
    LOL ! Gumby if he doesn't listen ? Hit him with a stick. It worked on my Irish grandfather when Grannie would do it

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    Quote Originally Posted by Reese View Post
    Actually, it's a fairly supbar piece. You wail about being a woman and hate against men. Consider for one second that you are a man.

    *smiles*

    I could definitely see how that could be interpreted here. I know I wrote it moreso about misconceptions, and the idea that the sexes thoroughly do not understand each other. Give me some specifics where you see hate please ?

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    "Woman reads only as Womb,
    to you..."

    "Revive men from the tomb,"

    "Because someone closed our Bible,"

    "We will erase your liquid pronouns"

    You make a lot of allusions to some unnamed "other." "Some" closed our bible, and "we" will erase your liquid pronouns. Who is this other? Men? What is this other force you seem to be fighting against?

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