Thread: Church

Iridescence cascades from above
Stained glass melts into rainbows
Cool stone flagged floors
Sanctuary

Pine pews and incense mingle

Outside a crow joins the choir
I feel peace in this moment
I think that’s why I come here

Alone.

Nice. Pleasant little read. Works the mood well. Touches on many senses.

Agree with Vangoghsear. Although i feel this piece would benefit from a little grammar. I'm assuming it was intentional?

I like the honesty of the last sentence and the refrain, it gives the reader a sense of character.

Originally Posted by gordon

Iridescence cascades from above
Stained glass melts into rainbows
Cool stone flagged floors
Sanctuary

Pine pews and incense mingle

Outside a crow joins the choir
I feel peace in this moment
I think that’s why I come here

Alone.

This is good minimalist writing. I am not a huge fan of the lack of punctuation LOL BUT ... like the others I assume that is intentional. The feel of the piece is reminiscent of " Sunday Morning Coming Down " and that is also a good thing in my opinion.

All in all I liked it Hun

Gordon, nice to read you again.

I like churches much for the same reasons. The sanctuary and the peace. How easy us humans can be to please, eh; just some stone and glass...

Nice piece and no nits. Take care man...

Very nice! Echo's my own sentiments perfectly.

Been a while, G.

Hi, gordon. Using an economy of words, you say so much about atmosphere and feelings. There are so many lines in this poem that's difficult to narrow down. I will say that I liked:

Stained glass melts into rainbows

Excellent poem. Thank you. Laurie