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A very effective poem, bryndavis.
The idea is different; creative. The whole piece flows nicely, and leads on well to the next stanza, and the writing style is very good to read.
However, some parts are unnecessary and could be lost. I see how it adds to the effect of the last stanza, but it seems to drag out just a little bit. I'm not talking about a huge cut here, but just a couple lines (for your consideration).
Great job with this!
Nick
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