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SparkyLT · 07-18-2008, 07:28 PM

Standing here

All alone

Like a king

Without a throne

Life goes on

C’est la vie.

Why won’t the sun

Shine on me?

A furry prince

A magic trick

The dragon emblem

Feels so slick

Through Life and Death

And all we fear,

Am I allowed

To shed a tear?

What have I done?

You hate me so.

You say not?

What do you know…

…

The dragon, now,

He comes to life,

Burning those

Who wish me strife

Across the land

My name is known

Not this, but another,

That I own

An elf lord, now,

He comes to me

Wishing hope

Prosperity

This elvin prince

Before me here

Is he another

Who I hold dear?

My “friends” of old

Now want me back

Now that I’m “someone”

I'll join their pack

Join their pack?

Sure I do!

I hate their guts,

And that is true

…

what time, what place

when am I due?

who was killed?

me? or you?

…

Never wanted

I see that now

A fool, I was

A stupid cow.

Who could want

A girl so bland?

Plain eyes and hair

And skin not tanned.

Reclusive, sure,

At the best,

And never able

To pass their test.

I wish it back

The way it was.

Leave me, dragon,

I hear a buzz…

&

Standing, still,

By this dark wall.

A hopeless case,

By and all…

(That was the first poem I really ever wrote. I'm not expecting much good from it. Later I wrote this one as a sort of continuation.)

It’s 2:30.

I’m awake.

It’s unearthly.

See me shake?

Eyes wide open

All my fears

Pounding on my

heart and ears

Thudding like

There’s no tomorrow

All this nonsense

All my sorrow

Leave me leave me

Go, Go, Go

Why is it you must

Hurt me so?

Something tells me

There’s no escape

Murder, anger

Pain and rape

See not heard

That day’s long past

Bloodsuckers now

Will break their fast

Blood spills everywhere

I soon die

Know I loved you

Though you not I

… … … …

Past is future

Future past

This small white room

Full-body cast

Friends…?

I don’t think

I know that word.

Please explain,

Self-proclaimed nerd

All around me

I feel love.

No more the arrow,

Now the dove

Though hearts still break,

Though people die,

I feel joy…

And Anger cries

Alone, with you

Now it’s clear.

I guess

You did

Hold me dear…

yeah, so, I just sort of wanted to end on a better note than before. that's all.

SparkyLT · 07-18-2008, 07:34 PM

um, sorry, something strange is going on with the formatting and I can't fix it. it's supposed to be a break between every 4 lines. sorry to double post, but I can't edit and fix it, so...

Damien. · 07-19-2008, 08:17 AM

Hmmm.... not bad. It doesn't read as if it's forced, but I find the "elvin" bit a little cliche. I fail to see a message here, but you do appear to have the rhyming thing down.

SparkyLT · 07-19-2008, 10:36 AM

hah, yeah, I can rhyme most of the time, but it gets boring after a while. I did break away from this format. eventually.

ohdear · 07-19-2008, 01:09 PM

Yes SparkyLT, shame about the formatting problem, made it harder to read, but not impossible. I enjoyed the journey, the full body cast was an interesting twist.
Parts of it reminded me of some of my early work and the angst it held.
I too have tried to move towards a lighter note, but more permanently.
thanks for sharing