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Poetry Poems, Haiku & Tanka etc.

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Old 07-18-2008, 01:19 PM   #1
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Love, Life, and Death.

A heart shattered and shaken,
His life was suddenly taken.
A car, a scream, a crash,
Their life was gone in a flash.

In empty arms she lay,
Lost love led astray.
Phantom arms wrap her tight,
A love that felt so wrong, so right.

The moon sheds its light,
Sad girl cries at night.
Broken dreams and broken heart.
A new life she has to start.
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Old 07-18-2008, 11:22 PM   #2
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Old 07-19-2008, 01:01 PM   #3
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a car, a scream, a crash

you dont need the and. (imo)

succinct, not meloncoly despite the subject
I liked it
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