Thread: cinquain

To tread
lightly for you
is a necessity.
You are easily broken and
too soft.

too soft
on your children
and they will grow into
being the greatest challenge of
your life

your life
and mine exist
for each other, a pair
of souls traveling, colliding
spirits

Spirits,
Beer, ales and wine
Can either destroy a
man's life or give him a good time
briefly

briefly
does the food taste
does the sun hang on high
but in their instants these joys shine
ever

ever
after lingers
on the tips of fingers
with everlasting promises
broken

Broken
promises, parts
of words left unspoken,
Betray the token of our hearts
Woken

woken
from light slumber
with sleep still in my eyes
yawning good morning to the world
hello

hello
four o'clock freeze
smell the street sweeper breeze
hear mellow tones of a struggling
cellist

I really like that Nathan, I think it is partly smell is so evocative, partly the way the senses switch from freeze to smell to breeze to hear, whatever it is I like it.

Thanks Olly.

yes, it's also quite a challenge coming up with the next cinquain, well done

Sorry. I can change the last word. Just tell me what will work.

no, it's good, leave it, i just have to think a lot harder

Well, if anyone can do it, you can. Look your AV is working on it right now.