Thread: Repeated Rhyme Challenge

The challenge here is to use only ONE rhyme throughout a poem, using it at least 4 times. With easier sounds you might try for 6, 8 or more repeats.

Please be sure to comment on the efforts of others if you have something nice to say. We all respond to encouragement. Or suggest a better word or phrase if you think of one. Please be polite and helpful.

Here is my example that uses 8 identical rhymes.


In My Garden Plot

Cats hate the smell of marigolds,
Or so I once was taught,
But now I have to question
All that I have thought
About flowers and felines and hatred
Souring my garden plot.
Both cats and goldies are loners,
Content in their favorite spot,
Both have a way to keep others at bay,
Seeming more alike than they ought.
I really must take time to ponder
Whether this means anything or not,
For guess where I found my kitty today
While weeding around the lot–
Asleep in the yellow marigolds
Curled up as if on her cot!


copyright © 2011 Phyllis Stewart

I had one here with 16 repeating rhymes, call Girl Scout Cookies, but I moved it to Poetic Humor.

I hope you will have a look: http://www.writingforums.com/poetic-...t-cookies.html

This one is called six minutes because that's exactly how long I had before my math student was due for his tutoring session. I made it, just barely!
The repeating rhyme is, of course, ING.

Six Minutes

A student is coming over
With homework he will bring,
So I only have six minutes
TIll I hear the doorbell ring,
I don’t really have the time
To think of anything
That the readers of this forum
Might find interesting.
So I’ll just write random words
In a long chaotic string,
And call it avant gaarde
And pretend it means something.

Jack and Jill went up the hill,
And my brother asked, "Alone?"
Did they walk up all the way,
or had they somehow flown?
Did Jack wish his sister to kill
with a ten-pound stone?
Was Jill even his sister
or just some hideous crone?
Or were they secret sweethearts,
a love furtively grown?
I don't think we'll ever learn,
it's a mystery unknown.

Petunia, cute and funny! Nice twist on the J kids! Thanks for posting.

Guess I should add another. Let's see... what rhymes with "run?"

Days of picnics in the park,
Under the summer sun,
While old folks chatted in the shade,
We kids twirled and spun.

Mother poured the lemonade,
Put each brat on a bun,
Then called us kids, "It's time to eat!"
"Not now, we're having fun!"

Today I watch greatgrandkids,
Whose life has just begun,
On days of picnics in the park,
As they laugh and play and run.

The children race from tree to tree,
Not caring who has won.
How it takes me back to summers
When we played in the sun.

I like what I'm reading on this thread.

I think all Villanelles would qualify. The rhyme scheme for a Villanelle is AbA abA abA abA abA abAA ... The upper case A and A are repeated lines. The a and b are normal rhymes.

Because it's an actual recognized form, I'm going to post my villanelle in the Structured Verse board. http://www.writingforums.com/structu...ml#post1469527

there is simply a first time to start
as there is a first time to brag
there is yes some time to read
but there is little time to preach
there are plentier times to speech
but there is hardly time to screetch
there is plenty of time to Be
and there are lots of things to see
there is always time to write
and yes there is that sounding word right!
that should keep us away from a might!
there is of course that time to try
those things like wanting to fly
then comes the time for that natural cry
only to then smile and say ''oh why''!!
hopefully time has it to splash!
on things that are there for laughs
there is also time to think of It
and of course time to sleep.on it
Oh there is so much ado for all out there!!
and so many things to do and flare
life would be so much simpler and fair
and no one would ever tumble or dare.

Annie, got a kick out of your villanelle! I can tell you where the cookies are, but don't want to cause a divorce.

Nacian, multiple rhymes here, repeated enough times for sure, but there is just supposed to be one rhyming sound used over and over. That's what makes it difficult, finding enough words ending with the same sound to put together in a way that still makes sense. Guess you just misunderstood the directions, but it was a fun read nonetheless.

There are a LOT of "ite" or "ight" words, so we could probably pave the forum with them! I just have time for a few, for the obvious reason which follows.

Addicted to WF

It's five o'clock in the morning,
By that I mean it's night.
I haven't been to bed yet,
And that just isn't right.

If my doctor only knew,
It'd give him quite a fright,
For if I don't get the rest I need,
My lungs will close up tight.

By the time I finally go to sleep
The sun will be shining bright.
So why am I still reading
And typing on this site?

copyright © 2011 Phyllis Stewart

This is actually fun. Phyllis, I liked your poem, Days of picnic... Nostalgic and sweet.
And addicted to WF, haha nice one.

Thx, Petunia. Hope you'll write another!

Sleep

Seems a waste of time
To drift away so deep
Every single night.
Wish I didn't have to sleep.

There's so much I could do,
If exhaustion didn't creep
To add weight to my eyes,
And show me those darn sheep.

copyright © 2011 Phyllis Stewart

There is some wonderful poetry here!! As soon as can , I want to try...I have enjoyed reading this thread. Peace...Jul

Jul likes what is here,
And says she wants to try
Repeating a rhyme
Herself by and by.
But she's taking so long
That I have to ask why
She's keeping me waiting,
Almost making me cry.


Just teasing ... couldn't help myself!

This is still a work in progress..

DAY DREAMS...


Here he comes,walking down the street,
that fine young man,i'd love to greet,
I would smile at him discreet,
then throw my heart right at his feet,
Then we'd go somewhere and meet,
His kiss would be so very sweet,
he make's my heart wildly beat,
I would make his life complete.
Oh---my eyes he did not meet,
There he goes --on down the street...

Wow, Jul! You doubled up on effort! You rhymed EVERY line the same, much stricter interpretation of the rules than I had in mind. Bravo! I just meant to use only one RHYME, but not on every LINE. Now you have raised the bar!

It's a sweet romantic idea no less. Last few lines are so sad, but that's how love is, sometimes one-sided.
Oh, I think you know that "goes" is misspelled, probably an accident.

Hmm... EVERY line? Let's see...

Jul has really raised the bar
And taken this game too far.
With the few rhymes that there are,
My effort must sound bizarre.
Since I'm not good enough to spar,
I'll just admit that she's the star
And applaud her from afar.
I bow to our new rhyming czar!

Okay I need a bit of time. I'll come soon hopefully.