Thread: Style challenge.

My new idea for a challenge is to ask you to write a poem in a particular style, I am not going to put a poll on this or make it competitive unless there is a demand for it; this is a challenge to test your creativity.
Writing in a particular style, I am told, is good for the appreciation of words and their definitions. I find after a short period of discipline of this sort my writing improves generally
I am not going to start with Haiku or Tanaka, they can come later, but with:-
Cinquain Poetry with five lines. Line 1 has one word (the title). Line 2 has two words that describe the title. Line 3 has three words that tell the action. Line 4 has four words that express the feeling, and line 5 has one word which recalls the title.

Thanks to Rcallaci for permission to use his poems as examples, over to him:-

What I call a "Circle Cinquain"


(From Heaven and Hell do Dreams and Nightmares come)


Dreaming
a vision quest
surfing on a rainbow
I fall through the sky into a
Nightmare


Nightmare
twisted visions
the gates of hell open
I pray to God that I’m only
Dreaming

Dreaming
altered visions
a stairway to heaven
hell hounds bite at my heels… Damn this
Nightmare

Nightmare
a glimpse of hell
dark fire and pitch black night
asleep or awake I’m forever
Dreaming

Dreaming
of nirvana
embraced by nothingness
illusion an empty dream turned
Nightmare



A variation of a Cinquain-

( The Heart is more than a muscle)


My Heart
missing a beat
a blood revolution
caught unawares by this vicious
Attack

Your Heart
in much distress
a great love turned sour
nothing but pain and one bad head
Ache

Our Hearts
once filled with love
now laid in waste and ruin
weak foundations just crumble and
Break
Thank you Bob, I hope you have the idea and look forward to seeing some entries.

i'm confused olly, some of the above examples don't match the instructions
i was under the impression traditional cinquain were about syllable counts
although, i understand word count is a totally acceptable variation; but
it's either one or the other as cinquain is a very exact writing discipline
you set the rules and stick to them, there is no changing mid stream

also, i don't know what to write about, is there a topic?

and question: are we writing to the examples
or to your above instructions? because
the two are not the same thing

regards,
completely confused, ash

edit: and pssst, i did start a cinquain thread quite some time ago
that i wish others would join in with me and play more often
alas, i appear to be the only cinquain addict these days

:(

What a superb thread, it certainly makes this look redundant, I would suggest that anyone interested in cinquains clicks on the link Ash gives in the post above and I move on to something else here.
I am afraid I copy and pasted the instructions and the examples from different sources and did not check properly so your confusion is really down to me.
Any suggestions for a different form would be gratefully recieved, there are a whole bunch of them, with and without examples, in a thread about the rules of poetry in poetic discussions.

p://www.writingforums.com/poetic-discussion/96475-rules-writing-poetry.html

Originally Posted by ash somers

i wish others would join in with me and play more often

You could always play with yourself.

Originally Posted by The Backward OX

You could always play with yourself.

Cheap shot.

Originally Posted by Olly Buckle

What a superb thread, it certainly makes this look redundant, I would suggest that anyone interested in cinquains clicks on the link Ash gives in the post above and I move on to something else here.
I am afraid I copy and pasted the instructions and the examples from different sources and did not check properly so your confusion is really down to me.
Any suggestions for a different form would be gratefully recieved, there are a whole bunch of them, with and without examples, in a thread about the rules of poetry in poetic discussions.

p://www.writingforums.com/poetic-discussion/96475-rules-writing-poetry.html

yeah, no worries olly, here's hoping *winks*

Originally Posted by Olly Buckle

Cheap shot.

I can only work with what I'm given.

So as we have a cinquain thread how about a different style? I am going to suggest the English (or Shakespearian) sonnet, that is with the rhyming form
abab
cdcd
efef
gg

Three quatrains and a couplet, don't forget the volta!

Originally Posted by ash somers

and pssst, i did start a cinquain thread quite some time ago
that i wish others would join in with me and play more often
alas, i appear to be the only cinquain addict these days

I just came here to say this. I really like the cinquain thread started by you. But I admit I was a bit disappointed when I realised it wasn't all that active. Still relatively new here, adjusting. But I find the cinquain thing addicting. Come on there, we'll play

Dreaming
mind scheming
thoughts flying, fleeting
heart screaming tacitly speaking
Musing

Musing
idea using
aspirations actually blooming
putting peoples perceptions alive
Doing

the pieces no longer fit
they're jagged and cursed
but i have to admit
that it could've been worse

i could've lost every bit of love
i could've been all alone
i could've been undeserving of
instead my chance was only blown

my opportunity's been shot
my luck has all run out
but my name was not forgot
and that's all i care about

memories of you and i still live
i'm just happy we've both still love to give

It's the end of the week
Almost time to go home
Today ends the streak
Of 'productivity syndrome'.

I worked hard all day
Trying to get some things done
And I'm happy to say
That I'm still number one

At stalling and waiting
And doing it later
I simply am stating
I'm a shirker of labor

To all the work I have left...
I say, "T-G-I-F!"

He must have been alone
if not then he was two
His voice, did say its phone
It was we heard it flou'

His door was left ajar
His footstep hard and clear
His movies jaded far
he knew he meant it near

His others rythmic blues
His books and music steared
Its Playful reared his moods
He knew he had them pleased

To all of those he knew
He had them all but few.


Hi Olly I am not sure this is what you mean..?? Have I udnerstood it or not ?