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Thread: Marriage challenge 7th June

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    Mentor Olly Buckle's Avatar
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    Marriage challenge 7th June

    I have been in touch with ChestersDaughter and she has replied,
    I'm curious to see what delicious tidbits are inspired by the wonderful topic of Marriage.
    Well so am I, it promises considerable entertainment and possibly some education.

    Please post your entries on the subject of Marriage below, you may use your own title.

    No other posts in this thread until the entry period is over in two weeks, comments may be made in the Bard's Bistro

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    If He's Wearing a Jersey of any Type, Don't even Date Him

    Life being wed is surely grand
    shackled by a dull gold band.
    I spend half my life preparing feasts
    to sate the stomach of a sports freak.

    Platter after platter
    I grudgingly serve
    while the blasting TV
    shreds my last nerve.

    I don't give a damn
    about the Mets' stats
    but I know what I'd hit
    if I were at bat.
    The Rangers won't see
    another Cup,
    he should shelve his dream,
    it's high time he woke up.
    It's no mistake
    Jets don the color of puke,
    he should shut the hell up,
    they can't hear his rebukes.
    The squeaking sneakers
    of the Knicks
    make me want to stone him
    with a ton of bricks.

    Stinking golf bores me to tears
    tennis grunts make me plug up my ears.
    Curling and bowling
    soccer and cricket
    made me dig him a grave
    in the Little League thicket.

    If he's lucky, all sports channels
    will go on strike
    'fore I make better use
    of my carving knife.

    Now, where was I?
    Life being wed is surely grand,
    just make sure you marry
    a sports hating man.
    Last edited by Chester's Daughter; 06-17-2010 at 09:33 PM.

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    the co-veil-ent bond

    a couple forms
    a cohesive force
    a co-veil-ent bond
    for better or worse

    balanced electrons
    attract-to-repulsion
    expulsion relation-
    ship-to-share
    with their

    better half had
    better have
    an equal ratio
    macromolecular
    overlapping orbit
    then till

    death does not destroy
    when death they do part
    they pair again
    but leave only half
    the remaining heart.
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    Bridesmaid

    Never content to be the bridesmaid;
    to fade in the shadow of another
    while her hopes and dreams evaporate
    like failing mist that rises
    only then to dissipate.

    Whispered words that rend the night
    to pierce her mind then cause her to awake
    in fright, to freeze and stare –
    strain to vocalise a prayer that will not come.
    Her tormentor won’t be put to flight
    as sweat breaks out
    while she grasps
    to turn on the light.

    Errant bridegroom
    penetrates the bridesmaid’s soul;
    escapes the withering gaze of broken bride
    who stands out in the cold;
    hears the bridesmaid softly tell him,
    “You’re the best.” –
    reminding him of every man she’s had
    but reassuring him
    he’s not like all the rest.

    Ashes from a shattered urn
    are scattered on the vestry floor;
    past loves bridesmaid recalls no more are
    ghostly shadows, which blur what she had seen
    before the chiming clock had cancelled out
    the promise of her dream;
    call to mind that things are seldom
    what they seem.

    With the wedding march still playing,
    she watches as confetti turns to dust
    amidst the plans that she’s been laying.
    The bouquet thrown but never caught;
    it lies and waits to be discovered,
    not by the seeker but the sought,
    in the guise of one more sad,
    abandoned lover.

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    Queen for a day

    Clink and clank
    I sometimes hear this in the morning
    rather abstract noise
    it could mean only
    one thing
    she's doing my dishes
    not odd
    she often does my dishes
    or cleans things up
    I'd thank her
    if I really cared
    she comes over often
    her husband
    is in some sort of business
    though
    I have never inquired
    he leaves
    she's alone
    she knows I'm alone
    all a matter of time

    I hope she leaves
    when the dishes are done

    I've never really had enough heart
    to tell her anything
    a knock on the door
    three knocks
    followed by two
    anyone who knows me
    knows the door is never locked
    I shuffle along and open anyway
    looking,
    there she is
    like an inherent catastrophe
    to a world
    that doesn't notice

    the routine is the same
    cleaning, crying, talking, sex
    she tells me
    he's not away on business
    he's with that hussy
    she speaks knowing
    I'm not really listening
    just comfort in talking
    then she complains about why I
    don't hold her now
    almost unbearable
    but I know
    what comes next

    she likes it hot
    she will turn on the heater
    something about sweating
    she said I think
    I don't mind
    the noise
    our two sweaty bodies make is enjoyable
    she will mover her head
    back and forth rapidly
    her long brown hair is always attacking me
    when it's over
    she goes to the bathroom
    I'm pretty sure
    she's getting herself off in there
    I don't mind
    by the time she comes out
    I'm asleep
    usually awoken
    by clinks or sweeps or sometimes
    she'll replace a light bulb

    that was our routine
    only this time
    when I heard the last clank
    I also heard plodding footsteps
    coming towards
    a kiss and a whisper
    I'm filing for divorce
    she leaves
    I rollover and think
    five minutes later
    I get up
    shamble to the door
    fiddle with the knob
    go back to bed

    from now on
    I lock my door.

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    Talk to me tonight

    Can you feel my winter
    from your summertime?
    You seem so suave...
    How we have grown apart!

    Please,
    don't ignore me when
    I'm darkly funny
    and talk to me tonight.

    Don't feel attacked
    by my faults,
    see how they skin me alive
    before the wolves.

    Our pasts
    we shouldn't trace
    by fighting
    in our pre-loved place.

    Talk to me tonight.

    I want to fall asleep
    believing it's allright:
    boon companions, you and I.
    I need to make you smile.

    Once again,
    I get rid of
    my worn out robes
    to be myself.

    Tell me how you feel,
    talk to me tonight,
    don't let silence kills us
    before dawn.
    Last edited by winkash; 06-20-2010 at 06:40 AM.
    "All, all is theft, all is unceasing and rigorous competition in nature; the desire to make off with the substance of others is the foremost - the most legitimate - passion nature has bred into us and, without doubt, the most agreeable one." Marquis de Sade
    Stagnant ponds are part of the universe, but they can't reflect it.

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    Time is up folks, you are welcome to post further attempts at the subject if you wish, but they will not be considered as part of the challenge.
    Please vote in the poll at the head of the thread.
    Comments are now very welcome in the thread.

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    Mentor Olly Buckle's Avatar
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    Time is up and Baron is this winner on this round, though if you look at the results it has been a tight thing.
    Congratulations to everyone on some excellent results, Baron has suggested that if you wish to copy your poems to the main forum for crit that will be acceptable and not considered double posting, nothing to stop people posting comments here once entries close but it does not seem to be happening, if you do copy it over please give the challenge a mention, we shall be off again as soon as I have been in touch with Baron.

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    Thanks, Olly! It was an honour to participate.
    Congratulations to B and all the poets here.
    I voted for the co-veil-ent bond. I like vse's chemical approach.
    "All, all is theft, all is unceasing and rigorous competition in nature; the desire to make off with the substance of others is the foremost - the most legitimate - passion nature has bred into us and, without doubt, the most agreeable one." Marquis de Sade
    Stagnant ponds are part of the universe, but they can't reflect it.

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    Winkash, that's funny; I voted for yours. I liked the way yours almost described a psychic bond, yet a separation between married people.

    Congo-rats Baron! Well done. Good job all entries, I thought.
    "PS: don't take technical advice about cold fusion from someone who can't spell fuzhun."

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    Quote Originally Posted by vangoghsear View Post
    Winkash, that's funny; I voted for yours. I liked the way yours almost described a psychic bond, yet a separation between married people.
    Very funny indeed. Thank you.

    In my opinion, for many reasons every once in a while this separation is healthy and necessary. =)
    "All, all is theft, all is unceasing and rigorous competition in nature; the desire to make off with the substance of others is the foremost - the most legitimate - passion nature has bred into us and, without doubt, the most agreeable one." Marquis de Sade
    Stagnant ponds are part of the universe, but they can't reflect it.

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