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    Prolific Writer obi_have's Avatar
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    Cavity Search

    The nursemaids craft alibis, canny,
    And the thieves know to cover their fanny.
    But to clear the above
    You'll need lube and a glove
    And start searching in each crook and nanny.

    (Spooner is rolling over in his grave...)

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    Disclaimer: I slept through all my english classes

    Nice, only suggestion would be maybe say "Bring lube and a glove" instead of "You'll need lube and a glove" just to keep both lines at five syllbles, reads a little smoother?

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    The syllables, I counted six,
    (To throw myself into the mix)
    "But to clear the a-bove"
    It fits like a glove,
    There really seems nothing to fix.

    I'm unsure of the alibis, canny part...
    Not that I ever thought myself smart.
    I enjoyed the lore,
    But was hoping for more,
    For to me it seemed like a good start.

    JRB

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