Thread: Tennessee Christmas

I'm not at the top of my form of late so I decided to work on a new meter. Not my usuall style but-- - -?

TENNESSEE CHRISTMAS


Well my Christmas tree came from Tennessee where the hills go up and down.
Had to drag it out so I gave a shout to my bro who gave back a frown.
But between us two we were able to do what we must to the big green thing,
Got it tied to the top, then without any stops, drove home and we soon were parking

The big problem now was to figure out how we could get the tree up fifteen flights.
As I looked at the job, my bro gave a nod and said he had solved our big plight.
“We’ll just drop a rope down then we’ll tie it around and we’ll pull it up easily then.”
So we found a long rope in the back of his boat, the clock by this time reading ten.

Well, we lowered that line, and it seemed really fine as we looped it around that tree.
Then we started to pull and it swung green and full ‘til it stuck at floor number three.
We gave a big tug and it hooked on a rug and we pulled ‘em both right off the terrace.
The folks in that flat were out quick as a bat and with shouts they began us to harass.

But them we ignored and the tree and rug soared, then they hit again on the next floor.
This time it acquired a star which was wired into plugs just inside of the door.
But it didn’t matter, the door we did shatter more people were shouting “Please stop...”
My back it was achin’ and things kept a breakin’, but we pulled til the tree reached the top.

I smiled with pride, my bro at my side, and my wife standing in the doorway
She looked rather odd but I gave her a nod and said,” It’s been a long day,”
She nodded right back then she gave me a whack. I said “Why you being so shrewish?”
She said,“Can’t you see we don’t need a tree, after all, we were both raised as Jewish.”

The meter does jump a bit as there are a few syllables missing here and there, but otherwise a nice poem for the holidays. Maybe not your holidays, but there are enough households out there feeling your pain.

I loved this, Prof. Great singsong quality and great story, loved that last line, lol, as well as woes that befell the bumbling brothers. Not sure about the line length, though. It could just be me, but I stumbled a few times which messed with the singsong. I kept wanting to split the lines in half, I found it easier to read that way, but again, it could be only be me. Much enjoyed!

Best,
Lisa